优点英语专题09读后续写（记叙文体）【母题来源】2021年新高考Ⅰ卷【母题题文】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:
优点英语Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Uponseeing
优点英语whathappened,theirsfathersuddenlyrealizedthattheycouldn’tcookwell.Thetwinsalmostburstintotears.Walkinguptothem,hemadeuphismindtoassisthischildren.“Hey,kids,don’tbeupset,andI’llhelpyouout.”hesaidwithasoftvoice.Thetwins’facelitup,andtheycleanedupthekitchentogether.ThentheirfatherinstructedthemhowtomakeFrenchtoastandcookporridge.Halfanhourlater,thebreakfastwasdoneperfectly.Thetwinspreparedthebreakfast,andwalkedoutofthekitchenwithexcitement.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.“HappyMothers’Day!”Thetwinsyelled.Theirmotherwasmovedtotears,lookingatherhusbandfollowingbehind.“Thisisaholidaysurpriseforyou.”Shegavethetwinsawarmhugwithtearsstreamingdownhercheeks,andtoldthemshewasextremelyproudofthem.Motherbitintoatoastanddeclareditwasthebestshehadevertasted,whichdelightedthetwinssomuch.Everythingwentamazingly.Thefamilysharedthebreakfasttogether,andtheroomwasfilledwithhappinessandtheirlaughter.【语篇分析】本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐，自己动手，做起饭餐来，但是不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在父亲的帮助下，获得成功，他们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲，妈妈非常感动的故事。【试题解析】今年新高考中读后续写贴近日常生活，不追热点，一如既往的坚持稳中有变的一贯做法。续写内容是母亲节为母亲做一顿早餐，给母亲带来一个惊喜，结果由于把做早餐想得太容易，其实做起来完全另一回事，可想而知结果一团乱麻。要求考生继续完成写作，使之成为一个完整的短文。【命题意图】从新高考评价体系的角度来讲，旨在考查考生的语言输出能力，以及语言的综合运用能力，不要让考生成为满堂灌课堂的牺牲品，只是英语学习的一个容器，要让考生作为一个有灵魂的学习主体，写出有思想有深度的文章。续写不仅要求考生深刻准确地理解上下文，更要在把控故事线和情感性的同时完成续写文章，使之成为一个叙事体完整的语篇。完全符合新高考“一核（立德树人），四层（知识、能力、素养和核心价值），四翼（基础性、应用性、综合性和创新性）”的评价体系，即144结构。【命题方向】依据普通高中英语课程标准和中国高考评价体系，落实立德树人根本任务，充分发挥高考育人功能和积极导向作用。
优点英语2021年新高考重在考查学生的逻辑框架思维、以及叙事和描写的能力，包括表情、动作、情感、语言和环境的细节描写。英语高考读后续写的内容，贴近学生的生活实际，通过生活中发生的人、事物中发现故事背后的所折射的价值观念。续写文章立意鲜明，符合新高考的价值导向和学生核心素养的发展的基本要求。【得分要点】顺利完成续写任务，实现写作的高分突破，必须紧抓新高考续写的两条金砖线：内在情感线、外在故事线。续写线索：无助——帮助指导——积极性提高——惊喜——感动。高分应对策略：一是准确把握段落续写，顺着故事线进行构思谋篇，如由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了。”可知，第一段可描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐；二是巧妙利用提示句，轻松实现故事内容的衔接与连贯，如根据第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了他们的母亲。”可知，第二段可描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐，非常感动；三是组织框架，提取框架式常用语块，进行续写写作。1.（2021辽宁省高二期末英语试题）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。NewYearwasjustaroundthecorner.Iwassecondgradethen,7yearsold.Oneday,onmywayhomefromschool,aladygavemeapieceofpapersayingthattheneighborhoodwasaskingpeopletogiveNewYearpresentstothosewhoneededthem.WhenIgothome,IshowedmymotherthepaperandsaidthatIwantedtotakepartinthisplan.Mymotherthoughtthiswasaverygoodideaandencouragedmetospreadkindnesstootherslessfortunatethanus.Shesaidwewouldbecome“NeighborhoodAngels(天使)”.Severaldayslater,mymothersaid,“Getready,andwewillgo.”“Wherearewegoing?”Iaskedmymother.“IwilldriveyoutoBootsDepartmentStoretobuysomethingyouthinkwouldbesuitableforaneighborhoodpresent.”,shereplied.Aswewentintothestore,mymothergaveme£20topayforthepresent.Thenshesaid,“I’llseeyououtsideinthecar.”Sheleftmealonetodotheshopping.Iwasnotusedtobuyingthingsonmyown,asIhadalwaysbeenwithoneofmyparentsbefore.Everythingseemedverystrangeandconfusingtome,butIcarriedon.IaskedmyselfwhatIshouldbuyandforwhom.Anideaquicklyoccurredtome.TherewasapoorboycalledRalphwholivedinourneighborhood.Iusedtoseehimoftenwithoutajacketduringthefreezingwintermonths,soIdecided,thenandthere,tobuyhimawarmjacket.
优点英语Ilookedatmanyjacketsandeventuallychoseaheavyblueone.Thepricewasjustwithinmyspendinglimit.Theassistantatthecheckoutasked,“Isthisforsomeone?”,asIpaidforthejackethappily.Isaiditwas,andshewishedmeaHappyNewYear.IfeltasifIwereareal“NeighborhoodAngel”.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Thatevening,mymotherhelpedmepackthejacketinbeautifulpaper.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:MymotherandIwaitedbreathlesslyforRalph’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyitopened._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】1．Possibleversion1:Thatevening,mymotherhelpedmepackthejacketinbeautifulpaper.Shewrote“ToRalph,Fromapersonwhocaresaboutyou”onit,afterwhichshedrovemeovertoRalph’shouseintheneighborhood.Mymotherparkeddownthestreet.Itookadeepbreathanddashedtohis
优点英语frontdoor.Seeingnootherpeoplenoticeus,IthrewtheNewYear’spresentdownonhissteps,pressedhisdoorbellandthenhidinthecar.MymotherandIwaitedbreathlesslyforRalph’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyitopened.OutcameRalph.Seeingthejacket,helookedastonishedandthencalledhismothertocomeout.Afterhearingthemsay“Thanks”loudly,IfeltveryproudofwhatIhaddone.AtthattimeIdecidedtobeagoodpersonspreadingkindnessforever.ItwasonthatnightthatIrealizedthetruththathewhohasnokindnessinhisheartwillneverfindkindnessinsomeoneelse.Possibleversion2:Thatevening,mymotherhelpedmepackthejacketinbeautifulpaper.Inthepackage,mymotherincludedaNewYear’scard,onwhichshewrote“HappyNewYeartoRalph,Fromsomeonewhocaresaboutyou”.Thenwegotdressedandheadedforhishouseinthecar.Ontheway,sheaskedhowtheideaoccurredtomeandItoldheraboutRalph.Shewasactuallyamazedatmyidea.Soon,westoppedatRalph’shouseandknockedonthedoor.MymotherandIwaitedbreathlesslyforRalph’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyitopened.Ralphwassurprisedtoseeusatthedoor.Mymotherexplained,“Weare‘NeighborhoodAngels’,andweareheretogiveoutNewYear’spresents.”Meanwhile,IhandedthejackettohimandwishedhimaHappyNewYear.Hisfacelitupandhethankedusoverandoveragain.Seeingthebigsmileonhisface,ImadeupmymindtobeaNewYearAngelintheyearsahead.Asyouknow,angelsareactuallyineveryone’sheart.【语篇分析】本文讲述了新年临近，作者做好事，给邻居一个男孩买礼物的故事。通过阅读所给文章可知，新年来临之际，作者接受了一个倡议：为需要的人赠送新年礼物，作者和妈妈来到商店，经过一番思考之后，作者决定给邻居一个男孩买一件夹克。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：那天晚上，妈妈帮助我用漂亮的纸把衣服打包好，所以接下来应该写作者传达对小男孩的新年祝福（比如写贺卡），以及动身去送礼物；第二段开头是：我和妈妈屏住呼吸等着Ralph开门。本段应该写Ralph的反应以及作者的感受。2.（2021山东省济南高二期末英语试题）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。EveryonelikesthebeautifulCinderella,butIliketheuglystepsister.ThesidewalkwasfilledwithshoppersasmymotherandIhurriedtothedepartmentstore.Iraisedmyneckforalookattheholidaywindowdisplay,butattheageofsixIwastoosmalltoseearoundthegrown-upswith
优点英语theirwintercoatsandpackages.Whenatlastwereachedthestore,Istoodwithmyeyeswidened.“Look,Mother,”Ishouted,pressingmyhandsagainsttheglass,“Cinderella.”BeforemyeyeswasthemostbeautifuldollIhadeverseen!Sheworeafairyprincesssuitmadeofshiningredsilk.IknewifIliftedherskirtIwouldfindhercrystal(水晶)shoes.Thetinytiara(冠状头饰)fastenedtohersilkygoldenhairshone.“Ifonlysheweremine,”Idreamed.“We’dhaveteaparties,sharesecretsanddancewithahandsomeprince.”Buttomydisappointment,mymotherguidedmeawayfromthewindow,explainingthatsheandmyfathercouldnotaffordsuchanexpensivedoll.“ButtherewillbeaveryspecialgiftunderthetreeforyouonChristmasmorning,Madge,”shesaid.“Ipromise.”LaterthatweekIleanedagainstMother’ssewingmachine,watchingtheneedleflashupanddown.“Betyoudon’tknowwhatthisis!”shejoked,holdinguptheclothformetosee.“MyChristmasdoll!”Iyelled.ItwasstillintheearlystagesbutIcouldmakeoutthehead,neckandbody.“Somuchtomysurprise!”MotherlaughedasIdancedaroundtheroom,alreadypretendingCinderellaandIwereattheball.Itwouldn’tbelongnow.Myexcitementgrewwitheachpassingday.Mothercontinuedtoworkonthedoll,andwheneverIwalkedintotheroomshewouldhideitunderapillow.Icouldtellbyhersmileshewaspleasedwithherprogress.OnChristmasmorningIjumpedoutofbed,randownthehallandquicklyarrivedatthelivingroomwheretheChristmastreewasplaced.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:There,underneaththetree,wasabeautifullypackedgiftbox._________________________
优点英语_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:ButIcouldseeMotherwatchingme,waitingformyresponse.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】There,underneaththetree,wasabeautifullypackedgiftbox.Insideitwasthe“doll”Iexpected.Withbutterfliesinmystomach,Ibreatheddeeplyandthenopeneditexpectantly.However,muchtomydisappointment,itwasnothingliketheonethatwesawatthestore.Sheworeaplainskirtwithasimpleface.Herblackwoolenhairwaspulledbackinaponytail,withnoshinytiaraatall,nottomentionthecrystalshoes.ShewasnothinglikeCinderella;shelookedmoreliketheuglystepsister.ButIcouldseeMotherwatchingme,waitingformyresponse.IknewMumwouldbesadifsheknewwhatIreallyfelt.Hidingmydisappointment,Ishoutedwithdelight,“She’shardtoresist!Thanks,Mum!”Arelievedsmiledappearedonmymother’sface.Fromtimetotime,Iwouldtakethe“uglystepsister”outandadmireit.Itisareminderofmymother’slove.Herlovewouldmakemespecialandhappyevenifthingsdidnotalwaystickalltherightboxes.【语篇分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者喜欢在百货商店的灰姑娘洋娃娃，但是父母买不起如此昂贵的娃娃，作者的母亲为了给作者一个圣诞惊喜，自己动手缝制洋娃娃的故事。1.段落续写：
优点英语①由第一段首句内容“树下有一个包装精美的礼盒。”可知，第一段可描写作者拿到母亲给她的礼物后的心情。②由第二段首句内容“但我可以看到妈妈在看着我，等待我的回应。”可知，第二段可描写作者虽然对这个洋娃娃感到失望，但是依旧喜欢，因为其中包含了妈妈的爱。1.续写线索：期待——拆礼物——失望——隐藏失望——欣慰——感悟2.词汇激活行为类① 拆礼物：openpresents/gifts② 等待回应：waitfortheresponse/reply情绪类① 期待：lookingforwardto/expect② 失望：bedisappointed/tolosehope/todespair③ 欣喜：gratulation/delight3.（2021浙江省高二月考英语试题）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。IwassurprisedwhenIreceivedashortmessagefrommyfatherwishingmeahappybirthday.Ihadexpectedtohearfrommymother,mygrandmotherandmyotherrelativesbutneverfrommyfather.Lyinginbed,memoriesofmyfatherfloodedback.WhenIwasalittleboy,Iregardedmyfatherasaheroabletodoanything.However,thingsslowlybegantochange.ThemoreIlearned,themoreIdoubtedwhathesaid.Thegapbetweenusgrewand,atlast,Ididn’tevenlikecommunicatingwithhim.Myfather,inmymind,hadnointerestintalkingwithme.Dinnerwastheonlytimeweweretogether.HehadnotimetowatchTVwithme.HewouldtellmetoaskmymotherifIneededsomething.HeevenrefusedtoanswermycallswhenIphonedfromschool.Igotaccustomedtothechanges.Ithoughtthatperhapsmyfathernolongerlovedme,soIhardlycommunicatedwithhimandevenwasunwillingtocontacthim.Astimepassedby,however,Ibegantowonderwhethermybehaviorwasright.AndIbegantobemoreandmoreupset.Ihadnoideahowtogetalongwellwithhim.Oneday,mymothertoldmethateachtimeIcalled,myfatherwasalwayslisteningbesideher.Suddenly,Ihated
优点英语myselfformycoldbehaviourtowardhim.Itriedthousandsoftimestoapologizetomyfather.Intheend,however,IwasalwaystooembarrassedaboutwhatIhaddone.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:ButthatSaturday,Iwassotouchedbyhisshortmessageanddecidedtosendareply:“Thankyou,mydearfather.”_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Twodayslater,Idecidedtogohome.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】ButthatSaturday,Iwassotouchedbyhisshortmessageanddecidedtosendareply:“Thankyou,mydearfather.”Withasincereheart,Ifinishedthemessageandsentitout,mylipscurvingintoasmile.Myheartpoundingfiercelyandmypalmssweating,Iwaitedforhisresponsenervouslyandanxiously.Afterawhile,amessagesentbyfathersaid,“Dadlovesyouforever.Comebackwheneveryoulike.”Seeingthis,Ifeltagreatsenseofwarmthwellingupin
优点英语myheartandsurgingthroughme.Twodayslater,Idecidedtogohome.AssoonasIopenedthedoor,agoodsmellofmealtookholdofme.Mymothersweptmeintoherarmswithhereyeswet.“Imissyouterribly,dear!”saidshe.“Where’smydad?”Sadanddisappointed,Ifoundonlymymotherathome.Suddenlyahandsomefaceappeared.“Surprise!”myfathersaid.“Tome,youarethewholeworld!”Ihuggedhimtightly,withtearsinmyeyes.Indeed,loveshouldbemadeknowntolovedones.【语篇分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者与父亲的关系一直非常冷淡。后来作者生日的时候收到了父亲的祝福短信，作者十分感动，并且发出了回信。后来作者回家表达了自己对父亲的爱。并且明白了爱就应该说出口。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“但那个星期六，我被他的短信深深打动，决定发一封回信：“谢谢你，我亲爱的父亲。””可知，第一段可描写作者发完短信后的心情。②由第二段首句内容“两天后，我决定回家。”可知，第二段可描写作者回到家后与父母的温馨时光。2.续写线索：回短信——感动——回家——抱父亲——感悟3.词汇激活行为类①.发送：senditout/send②.回家：gohome/returnhome情绪类①.感谢：showinghisappreciation/showhisgratitude/begrateful②.伤心：sad/heart-broken
