优点英语2020-2021学年高二英语热点写作提升专练(通用版)热点12.日记+读后续写+概要写作1.这个周末，你和同学参加了一次采摘活动。请将这件事用英文以日记形式记述下来。介绍这次活动，内容包括：1.农场情况；2.采摘过程；3.个人感受注意：1.词数100左右；2.题目已为你写好。题目：MyWeekendMonday，February18Fine【参考范文】MyWeekendMonday，February18FineWetookpartinapickingactivitythisweekend.Wedrovefromtheschool,andthefarmwasabout2kilometersawayfromourschool.Whenwearrivedatthefarm,therewereallkindsofanimals,greenfreshvegetablesandfruittreesinthefarm.Weweredividedintotwogroups.Onegroupwasresponsibleforpickingfruits,theotherpickedupthefruits.Timeflyingquickly,weknowhowhardthefarmersareandhowpreciousthefoodis.Weshouldtreasurethefoodplantedbythefarmers.【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写一篇日记，记录这个周末和同学参加的一次采摘活动。第一步：审题
优点英语体裁：应用文时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时。结构：总分法总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。要求介绍：1.农场情况；2.采摘过程；3.个人感受第二步:列提纲（重点词组）takepartin（参加）;awayfrom（远离）;arriveat（到达）;allkindsof（各种各样）;divideinto（分成）;beresponsiblefor（对……负责）;pickup（捡起）第三步：连词成句1.Wetookpartinapickingactivitythisweekend.2.Whenwearrivedatthefarm,therewereallkindsofanimals,greenfreshvegetablesandfruittreesinthefarm.3.Onegroupwasresponsibleforpickingfruits,theotherpickedupthefruits.4.Timeflyingquickly,weknowhowhardthefarmersareandhowpreciousthefoodis.5.Weshouldtreasurethefoodplantedbythefarmers.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表文章结构顺序：Firstofall,Firstly/First,Secondly/Second…Andthen,Finally,Intheend,Atlast（供参考）2.表并列补充关系：Whatismore,Besides,Moreover,Furthermore,InadditionAswellas,notonly…but(also),including（供参考）3.表转折对比关系：However,Onthecontrary,but,Although+clause(从句),Inspiteof+n/doing,Ontheonehand…,Ontheotherhand…Some…,whileothers…,asfor,so…that…,one…theother…（供参考）4.表因果关系：Because,As,So,Thus,Therefore,Asaresult（供参考）连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。【范文点评】[高分句型1]Whenwearrivedatthefarm,therewereallkindsofanimals,greenfreshvegetablesandfruittreesinthefarm.当我们到达农场的时候，农场里有各种各样的动物，绿色新鲜的蔬菜和果树。（when
优点英语引导的时间状语从句和therebe句型的运用）[高分句型2]Timeflyingquickly,weknowhowhardthefarmersareandhowpreciousthefoodis.时光飞逝，我们知道农民是多么的辛苦，粮食是多么的珍贵。（how引导的宾语从句的运用）2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Amandawasdisheartenedwhenshelookedacrossthetableatherthree-year-oldsister.Lisatonaseat,drinkingfromhersippycup.WonderingwhyLiwasstillafraidofher,AmandatookacookieoffherplateandhelditouttoLi,“Wantabite?”AssoonasLisawAmandareachingover,hereyeswidened.Shejumpeddownfromherseatandracedtoherroom.Whatanannoyance!AmandacomplainedtoMomthatshehadthoughtbeingabigsisterwouldbefun.MomtookAmanda’shandremindingherthatLiwasinanewcountrywithanewfamilyandhowscaredshemightbe.“Honey,sheisstillgettingusedtoyou,”Momadded.“It’sonlybeentwoweeks.”Overayearago,Amanda’sparentssaidthattheywereadoptingadaughterfromChina,andAmandahaddancedwithexcitement.She’ddreamedoftakinghersistertothepark,readingbookstoher,andteachinghertorideabicycle.Thathadn’thappened,though.IntheweekssincetheirtriptoChina,Lihadonlylettheirmomanddadnearher.Amandahaddrawnpicturesforher,readtoher,andmadefunnyfaces,butnonehadworked.Whenevershegotclose,Liranaway.“IjustwishIknewhowtohelpher,”Amandasaidtoherself,thinkingofLi’sfrightenedeyes.Asshesatontothecouch,sheturnedontheTVandbegantowatchacartoonaboutadogandacat.Afterafewseconds,Amandarealizedthatthecartoonwasinanotherlanguage.Theshowlookedfunny,butshedidn’tunderstandanyofit.Sighingdeeply,sherememberedthedayswhentheywereinChina.ShehadgotfrustratedwhenpeopletalkedinMandarin,thelanguagespokeninLi’sprovince.注意：1.续写的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Paragraph1:“That’sit.”AmandaspedtoLi’sroom.
优点英语Paragraph2:Momcametothedoorandfoundthemsittingsidebyside.【参考范文】Para1:“That’sit.”AmandaspedtoLi’sroom.ShegatheredallhercouragetoaskLiinMandarinwhethershewouldliketoseeacartoonwithher.Forthefirsttimeever,Linoddedherheadindelight,excitementshiningfromhereyes.AlthoughAmandawasnearlyatalosstounderstandwhatthecartoonwasabout,Lisparednoefforttomaketheprogramcomeacross.Bothsisterswereimmersedinthewarmthbetweenthem.Para2:Momcametothedoorandfoundthemsittingsidebyside.Happinesswelledupfromthebottomofherheart.Notinherwildestdreamcouldsheimaginethathertwobeloveddaughterswouldgetalongwellwitheachother.Itwasnotuntilmompattedthetwoonthebackthattheyrealizedmom’spresence.Momwasdelightedtoseethespecialbondscreatedbetweenherdaughters.Withsunlightstreamingintotheroom,thefamilywereintheseventhheaven.【解析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Amanda一直无法取得妹妹Li的信任，最后得知妹妹Li是父母在中国收养的孩子，来到一个全新环境中，最后因电视中正在播放中文动画片这一机缘巧合，使得Amanda逐渐发现了不信任的产生源于语言沟通的障碍。
优点英语1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“有办法了”可知，第一段可描写Amanda找到汉语学习资料，入门并运用，接着打破两人隔阂的过程。②由第二段首句内容“妈妈来到门口，发现他们并排坐着。”可知，第二段可描写妈妈的反应，以及姐妹互动的过程。2.续写线索：奇怪的隔阂——失望与困惑——找到原因——学习汉语，打破隔阂——母亲欣喜——姐妹进一步互动3.词汇激活行为类：鼓起勇气：gathercourage/getupthecourage；想要做某事：wouldliketo/feellikedoingsth.；尽力：sparenoeffortto/tryone’sbestto情绪类：困惑：beataloss/beconfused；高兴：indelight/happiness/delighted/pleased【范文点评】[高分句型1]AlthoughAmandawasnearlyatalosstounderstandwhatthecartoonwasabout,Lisparednoefforttomaketheprogramcomeacross.(运用了although引导让步状语和what引导宾语从句)[高分句型2]Notinherwildestdreamcouldsheimaginethathertwobeloveddaughterswouldgetalongwellwitheachother.(运用了部分倒装)3.阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。TheWorldHealthOrganization,orWHO,estimatesthatmorethan300,000womendieeveryyearduringpregnancyorchildbirth.Eachyear,about2.6millionbabiesareborndeadandanother2.7millionbabiesdieduringthefirst28daysoflife,itsaid.MostofthedeathsaretakingplaceinSouthAsiaandinAfrica,southoftheSaharaDesert.Manyofthedeathscouldhavebeenavoidedwithqualityhealthcare,WHOofficialssaid.Somestillbirths(birthsofdeadbabies),infant(new-bornbaby)deathsordeathsofmothersresultfromcomplications(并发症)duringchildbirth.Othersmayresultfromhealthproblemswiththemother.Apoordietorusingdrugsmayalsobetoblame,theWHOadded.Anotherproblemisthatnearlyallbabieswhoarestillbornandhalfofallnewborndeathsareneverdocumented.Thosedeathsarenotreportedtoorinvestigatedbygovernmenthealthagencies.Traditionsandbeliefsoftenaffectthecollectionofimportantrecordsaboutinfantdeaths.Inmanycountries,thereisabeliefthata
优点英语stillbirthmaynotrepresentalostlife.OfficialssaidthismeanstheactualnumberofstillbornandnewborndeathsisprobablyevenhigherthantheWHO’sowncurrentestimates.TheUnitedNationsagencysaysthelackofinformationmakesithardertofindsolutions.Itisimportantforallbirthsanddeathstoberecordedsothathealthofficialscanmakebetterdecisionsonhowtopreventfuturedeaths.TheWHOreleasedthreereportsearlierthismonthtohelphealthagenciesdoabetterjobcollectinginformation.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】TheWHOsaysthatalargenumberofbabiesdieatbirthorsoonafterbirthandwomendieofchildbirtheveryyearinlessdevelopedareas.(要点1)Manydeathsarecausedbypoorhealthcare,apoordietortheuseofdrugs.(要点2)Meanwhile,duetothetraditionsandbeliefs,nearlyallinfantdeathsareseldomrecorded,makingithardertofindsolutionstopreventfuturedeaths.(要点3)SonowtheWHOishelpingtoobtainmoreexactinformationaboutbabydeaths.(要点4)【解析】本文为概要写作。概要写作，简言之就是对所读过的文章简要概括，写出文章的中心大意，也可称之为摘要。主要考查对文章主旨大意的概括和准确获取关键词的能力，同时考查学生用简洁语言概括文章重要信息的能力及对文章整体结构的把握能力。1）细读原文。首先要仔细阅读短文，掌握文章主旨和结构，明确各段的大意。2）弄清要求。概要写作是写全文概要，或者就某些问题写出要点，略去不必要的细节。3）列出原文要点。解析原文的内容和结构，将内容分项扼要表述并注意在结构上的顺序。在此基础上选出与文章主题密切相关的部分。4
优点英语）写作时注意要把文章的具体信息用一些具有概括功能的词和句表述出来，而不是抄袭文章的原句，通过对文章中的单词、词组和句子进行合理转换，再用合适的语言表述出来。概要应同原文保持协调，注意要点之间的衔接，要用适当的关联词语贯通全文。有时也可对原文句子做一些同义词替换，如果结构上也能有一些转换会更好可采用句型转换、同义词的运用、概括、主被动语态、合并句子等对文章的具体信息进行概括。此外还要计算词数，看是否符合规定的词数要求。【范文点评】本概要写作文章结构合理，基本与原文一致。文章中运用了一些较高级的词汇，如alargenumberof;dieof;lessdevelopedareas;dueto;findsolutionsto等。文章句式比较灵活，以简单句为主，与高级句型相辅相成。文章中的高级句型有宾语从句TheWHOsaysthatalargenumberofbabiesdieatbirthorsoonafterbirthandwomendieofchildbirtheveryyearinlessdevelopedareas.以及非谓语动词Meanwhile,duetothetraditionsandbeliefs,nearlyallinfantdeathsareseldomrecorded,makingithardertofindsolutionstopreventfuturedeaths.
